Hey...What about poetry.

[thedexter102]

Dude your a genuis.

EDIT:
I wonder...
Well I wonder all the time but,
still,
I wonder.

I wonder if the smiles on their faces are forced.
if I’m “good” enough.
if what I eat will kill me.
if my life will kill my children.
if everything is real.

I wonder what we are.
what they want from me.
what is making me write this.
what is perception.
what will I have tomorrow

I wonder why I dread it so much.
why they want so much of me.
why I only appear this way.
why I’m alive at all.
why I don't know yet.

I wonder...
if I need to wonder less.

[Navarre]

Dude your a genuis.

Thanks.

Good poem, Dex.

[thedexter102]

I have sevaral more of those including one about being a poem. I'd like to here some origanl Spoilerite poetry because we havn't had much yet.

[Navarre]

Your light beckons me from places I cannot go,
Teasing my upturned face; expectant and longing.

I am a candle lit inside the sun,
Consumed by your radiance and burned away.

[thedexter102]

I am a candle lit inside the sun,

ohhh, me like.

[Navarre]

It is a poem I wrote a long time ago for a woman I still love. As you can see, the love was (and is still) unrequited.

Her very existence and presence was so overwhelming that it inspired the candle line. Ah, stupid romantic love.

[thedexter102]

It's worse when they don't return those feelings.

[Navarre]

Tell me about it.

I've moved on but it's not like you can choose to stop loving someone. I think of her daily even though I haven't seen her in over three years. It still aches.

There will come a time when I will see her again on a regular basis. When that time comes I am determined not to let my feeling cause issues between us or impair what should otherwise be a happy life.

But you wanted poetry and that's the first one that I remembered.

[thedexter102]

It's good.

[thedexter102]

It was national Poetry day in the UK yesterday so to celebrate here's a poem by a freind of mine:

Tangled Web

I weave a tangled web
But files are not my prey
Humans are the prey I seek
In a web of lies

My web clutches to pillars
Pillars of evidence I've built
If you look closely ,you can tell
And my web of lies will come crumbling down

My prey walks into my web of lies
Some planned some not
I cut them loose, I can't risk
My web of lies crumbling down

My web begins to break in places
People escape
My pillars fall, one by one
And my web of lies crumbles around me.

I lie in the remains of my web of lies
And my once prey gathers around me
And I realise my web of lies has killed me

[@lantis]

So dexter, I have one critique of your Wonder poem.  I don't believe "good" should be in quotations marks.  I don't know about you, but I feel the line is more powerful if you are actually wondering about self-worth.  By putting it in quotations you imply that you've kind of already made up your mind on the issue because you're judging the phrase.

Tangled Web was good in idea, but I felt the pacing was off on a lot of lines.  I also wish it used more imagery, but that's just me.

[thedexter102]

It's not mine but I really like it.

[Navarre]

Tangled Web doesn't touch me at all. I think Wonder is good.

[thedexter102]

Ok as promised in the NaNoRiMo thread here is the poem dated Nov 3 this year. (Side note if you have no idea what I'm talking about click here:http://www.majorspoilers.com/smf/index.php/topic,2158.0.html )
It's called Tiny Dancer and is based upon the song of the same name. Here we go:

Hold me closer,
Tiny Dancer,
Let the waves roll
over your back.
Let the Serenity
fade and the lights
Die.

Let the living curse
and the dead
scream.

Let the fire
crackel and the time
dwindel.

Let the memorys
overtake you
Don't let them
wake you.

Let the feeling
disipate
Let them all
anticipate.

Let the melody
flow
and the music
linger.

Hold me closer,
Tiny Dancer.
And never let
me go.
     
 
   

[Navarre]

Edits for you: "memorys" should be "memories" and "disipate" should be "dissipate".

I like the poem though. Painful, like most good poetry. *grins*