Hey...What about poetry.

[SpiderLover]

That is very good, Spiderlover.

Though I must wonder if one could ever forget when they cannot first forgive. And, of course, it is hard to forget when you create a mental landmark by virtue of the poem itself.

So, it is now years ago, not seven months. How do you feel about the message of the poem upon rereading it?

Well I got that one publish and it gave me college tuition money so hey it worked for something. I guess when I wrote that I meant it as I will not forgive you for what you have done, but I will forget about you. If that makes any sense.

As far as how I feel about it now, I cannot really believe that is me anymore. I have changed so much from that person that it feels a little alien reading it now. I still like the work, but the emotion that was put into that piece does not reside in me any longer.

[thedexter102]

Lather, Rinse, Repeat. 

[Blackthunder01]

I've had a few published in high school.  I can't recall more than a few opening lines now.  One is based on a D&D ad that I had to write an assignment on and the other I wrote for some one special as a Christmas present.

[thedexter102]

Any one want to give me pointers on my poem.

Blue.
The calm
Peace everlasting
Like banners of love
Waving on a summer's day.
Life
Forever
Animals of exquisite beauty
Each with out a care, remind me
of you.
Blues
In songs
The beat, the message
And the joy sprung from it
From the poets and the liars
Sprang you
Blue.

[Navarre]

Blue is often associated with melancholy and grief more than tranquility and certainly love. So why blue?

"banners of love" is a bit cheesy?

"with out" should be one word.

The last part, beginning with "In songs" is by far the best part because its reference to the best, poets, and liars, seems truer to "blue" and more emotionally stirring than whatever blue has to do with pretty animals.

[Gaumer]

I took that your poem was about the ocean. I know whenever I see of smell the ocean (which is not very often) it reminds me of other things. Usually people I spent time with near the ocean and that smell. Which is what I got from you piece.

[thedexter102]

I just wrote what I thought when I think of blue.

Words just came. Saying that it's designed as a proformance piece.  

Gaumer hit it on the head. The animals are fish but I alwayd leave things open to the readers interpriation.

[Navarre]

If it's free-form then it's perfectly cool. But then, we couldn't give you pointers on such a thing.

[thedexter102]

You can. You can still go on about tone, word choice, structure, style ect.

[Navarre]

Oh, okay. Well, I did?

[thedexter102]

And I respect your opinion and when I have insperation to re-write it i will take your advice on board.

[Navarre]

I think the very process of writing is the key. So many writers (poetry or prose) fail to write because they are working too hard to craft perfection.

I have found I get the most enjoyment and, arguably, the most benefit from simply writing whenever the mood strikes.

[thedexter102]

Well I just sat down and knocked that out in an hour.

[The Mighty King Cobra]

Ah, dammit, haiku!
Your are just to difficult!
Not enough Syllab

[thedexter102]

Love it.